And then, I took out the verbs in past tense, adjectives and adverbs, for my students to put back in.
Anyway, I'm kinda proud of it, so here it is.
Dear friend:
I write to you to let you know of a
horrible experience that I just went through. Please, be most
careful, least this happens to you and your family.
It all began like this: we were just
happily having a pick in the backyard of my grandparents' ranch, when a
eerie sound started. Nobody knew what it was. We asked our
grandfather but he said that he never heard anything like that
before. So we continued our picnic and eventually the sound kinda dissipated. We could still hear it, but only by being very alert. So
we were most of us just having a good time and then a weird person
appeared, from nowhere. I swear, we didn't see him coming, he was
just there. So my dad...
Sorry, sorry. I cried... ignore the ink
stains. Please.
So, my dad, he went to this person and
asked “Hey, fella, this is a private party, you know?”
And the man said nothing, but he looked
at my father and then walked towards him, and bit his face off.
Just like that. None of us did
something about it; we were shocked. My father didn't even make a
noise, and then the thing bit his throath and like, it started
drinking his blood.
And still we did nothing. Most of the
people at the party hadn't even noticed; they were still chatting and
eating like everything was normal. And then someone started to
scream; I think it was one of my cousins. She was asking for help or
anything like in the movies; she was just going
“iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii” without breathing or anything. So obviously, everyone first paid attention to her, all going around,
asking her “What's wrong, honey, what's wrong?”. But she couldn't
talk, she just kept going “iiiiiiiiiii” until she fainted.
I was paralized, I couldn't take my
eyes of the monster just sucking up my dad's blood. I think I was the
only one to see it stop; it just opened it's mouth, a huge mouth with
big, sharp teeth, and he opened his mouth and my dad's body simply
fell to the ground. So this thing kinda looked around and made that
noise, the first noise, and others answered!!! I could hear the same
noise coming from other direcctions around the house. At that point,
somebody was carrying my cousing back to the house, and no one was
looking that way, no one heard the noise...
And these things, they came, walking
like normal people, and then when they were close enough, they bit.
In a couple minutes the yard was total chaos, people running, crying,
bleeding...
I was frozen and then I saw out of the
corner of my eye saw a movement and turned around and a thing, a
thing so hideous, it looked almost like a person except for the
mouth, its gruesome mouth, with some many teeth it couldn't even
close it properly, and it was coming for me...
I ran. I don't really remember much
after that, somehow I ended up in the back of a truck, with some my
cousins and other relatives, going down the road like the world was
going to end, until the sheriff chased us down, and sort of put all
of us in jail (one of my cousins is pregnant, and another was like,
making this gurgling noise and was half drowning in her own saliva,
so they sent those two to the hospital, along with my grandma who was
in shock).
Some police officer released us the
next day. Apparently the sheriff went to my granddad's ranch... he
didn't come back, but one other officer did. One of my aunt's, who
had driven the truck to town, had a long talk with him, and
afterwards packed all of us survivors in a bus to the city.
We're staying with great grandma
Monique, because she never got along with uncle Tad, so he didn't
invite her to the party (it was Tad's marriage anniversary...).
Anyway, I know you also spend the
summer at the ranch of your family, so please, please, be very
mindful of strange noises.
With love, Sam
Please, take care.
I hope to see you
soon.
I was kinda listening to a documentary on zombies, so...